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'55 chevy midnight flights by ~misfithelena:iconmisfithelena:





I.
three girls in the backseat
quiver shake and rock
like they know they will, the day
they know they're never coming back
captain madness at the wheel
shakes his fist at the open road
and my hair flies in the summer wind

II.
we forget we're just three small girls
in an old car in a huge dark world
but for now, that '55 chevy is our universe
with our silent driver
we are small and wild-eyed
captain madness has joined us in the backseat
tiny bones halfway out the window
screaming joy
alive for one drive

III.
this time around the block it's different
the old car screeches (o how it used to hum)
now we're all halfway out the windows
screaming only air, because
everything else has been yelled before
it's all been hollered already
from some other backseat
©2004-2009 ~misfithelena
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Author's Comments

we rode all summer night and slept all summer day

Daily Deviation

Given 2004-12-20

'55 chevy midnight flights by ~misfithelena. Nothing esoteric, just simple language well written into a good poem about three girls enjoying a wild ride in an old car. (Suggested by ~wordman and Featured by `ndifference)

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:iconwordman:
Excellent. This is the best I've read on this website in a while. You've really brought the reader back into the back seat with you. Nothing esoteric, simple language well written into a good poem. :+fav:

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:icondemonlight:
Nicely done. I like this: none of the screaming angst that seems to dominate the picture around here. The way you employ linebreaks to continue the theme rather than relying on terminal cesura is masterly. Normally I'm not a fan of minimal punctuation, but in this peice, it does seem unwarranted. Well done.

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:iconwildoats:
Interesting. Proof that simplicity works wonders. However, I'm wondering: does this poem need to go somewhere? Move a little more? Hm.

Quality writing, but I would have liked it to progress a little.

Still good and congrats on the DD.

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:iconhabeus:
Nice poem, very well written. I like the concept.

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"Poetry is when an emotion finds a thought, and the thought finds words." Robert Frost
:iconnex9k9:
I loved this. Made me think i was really there.
:iconlinkinluver13:
Nice job, I like the imagery in this. It really brought the reader on the ride as well. :_fav:

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:iconnosugarjustanger:
that is really good.. I am so happy you got yourself a Daily Dev! +fav Gotta fave it.. keep writing!

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:iconswordexpert:
Very nice writing. I like the overall simplicity of the poem. It makes me think back to my childhood days and how they were spent.

I enjoyed this a lot!!


BRAVO on the daily deviation.

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